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Composition - Internet
Internet is no doubt one of the great investigation during 90's era. At first it used in commercial purpose. Just like a company makes their web pages to publish to internet, then their clients and even all internet users around the world can go to their website for navigation, trading and communication. Later on, Instant Messenger (IM), which is used as communication instantly through internet came out, IM totally dominate our communication behaviour, now it become a most popular communication tools beside cell phone. Until these few years, Web2.0 technology is adopted to internet. Web 2.0 changed the role of internet, once internet only can provide information to user, but after the emergence of Web2.0, it can provide a platform for reverse side, that means you can not only to get information, but also to share information. This concept bring a Internet revolution, nowadays we write a blog daily, we post our view in a web forum, and even we share our video to other people, etc.
Certainly thing always have both side, the benefits of internet have a lots. Firstly Internet gives a free platform for people communicating with each other within countryside border. Secondly it works 24/7, which means we can use it seamless anytime and anywhere. Thirdly Internet as a intellectual world, people can find their answer and solution easily by using search engine, such as google, yahoo, aol, and msn, etc... when they are faced to their problem. If there is no their answer or solution, then they can publish their question to some discussion forum, it let any users experienced on it to give you the sophisticated sharing. Finally when you feel so bored, internet give you the most convenient and interest way. For example, you can chat with the others by IM, watch video what you watch, share your interest on discussion fourm, and even go shopping or auction market to buy what you like.
Internet have some shortcomings, first of all, people relies on IM and email for communication, which makes them lack of spoken language and skill. Secondly it involves the security issue. Nowadays many commercial trading, such as stocks, consumer products, durable goods, etc... all are using Internet to complete the trade. In case there is a lackage of personal or sensitive information, people or company may make a loss unawares. Finally, Information on Internet is lack of a efficient management, we can find many solution for one question, but many of them haven't proven, so in some extent it may mislead people to a wrong direction.
Up to now people spend time on internet is increasing, whatever commerical or personal, it play a important role on our life. It's a necessary for daily life. Think back to ten year ago, people can still living within Internet. Today Internet can't be absent, due to our work, entertainment, community, and many many essential things all need this platform to perform. Do you sense Internet to happen anywhere? Not only computer can go Internet, but also our mobile phone, pda, and even TV, I believe every device can go Internet in the future. Let us look at it!
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